Describing Waterfalls   24 comments


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LEVEL 1: BASIC SENTENCES

1. The waterfall was aquarium-blue. COLOUR

2. It was drizzling onto the rocks. SOFT SOUNDS

3. The larger waterfall was pounding the rocks. LOUD SOUNDS

4. It tumbled down the mountain. ACTION

5. The bliss-pool at the bottom was varnish clear. A DIVINITY-POOL

6. It looked like a wall of blue satin threaded with silver. TEXTURE

7. The flowers next to it were nodding gently. OTHER IMAGES

8. It was freezing and we were shaking with the cold. SENSATION

9. The flowers growing nearby had a honey sweet smell. SMELL

10. We ate an ice cream cone on the bank and it was divine. TASTE

 

                                 LEVEL 2: A BASIC PARAGRAPH

The waterfall was Atlantis-blue. It was gushing over the rocks. At its widest point, it was surging and plunging down the mountain. It had a beautiful serenity-pool at the bottom. It was veneer clear. The waterfall flowed as smoothly as syrup. The frogs croaking nearby added to the wonderful sounds. We threw ourselves under the waterfall. It was so cold that we started shuddering. We collapsed on the bank and let the nougat sweet smell of flowers wash over us. Later we had some ham sandwiches and they were Godly.

 

 

 

LEVEL 3: CREATIVE PARAGRAPHS

The waterfall was Mediterranean-blue and magical. It was swishing over the rocks joyfully. It was thundering down into the pool like a gigantic water spout. When it toppled into the ecstasy-pool, it foamed it at the bottom. The rest of the pool was as clear as cellophane, enabling us to see down into the rocky bottom. Fronds of forest-green plants waved gently in the depths. The waterfall looked like a sheet of blue velour as it swished down. Its edges were hemmed with whipped-white lines.

We could see a gaggle of geese grazing by the bank and the scene was picture perfect. A group of Amazonian ferns, edged with saw’s teeth and statue still, added a tropical flavour. We stood under the waterfall to cool down, but it was catacomb cold. It gave us goose bumps immediately. We ended up quivering and shivering on the bank. The nectar sweet smell of the spring flowers perked up our spirits. We had a cup of chocolate and it was Godlike after our moment of madness.

 

                                 LEVEL 4: ADVANCED PARAGRAPHS

We gasped in astonishment at the clarity of the Caribbean-blue waterfall. It was spurting over the basalt rock, spilling eel-like over the ledges. Its clamorous passage at the foot of the mountain threw up bubbles of spray. They sparkled uneasily in the dying light and shimmered like the ghostly, blood drops of a phantom.

There was a whooshing vortex at the bottom. It was caused by the plummeting funnel of water that spiralled from on high. It looked like a drape of blue aluminium, such was its lushness. The cascade was sieved with silver at its fringes, lending a hallucinatory quality to it.

Wagtails were bobbing and dipping on a rock, foraging for juicy flies. The tip of the rock pierced the rhapsody-pool like the upturned nose of a dwarf. Run off water tingled the rock as it seeped away, distilled as pure and clear as an angel’s tears. There appeared to be a cave under the arch of waterfall. Quickly shedding our jumpers and shoes, the bravest of us plunged into it. The watery slide we passed through was so cold that our bodies were quaking when entering the cave.

At first, our only impressions were of a curtain of doom-black confronting us. Then our senses became fully attuned. The air was musty and rank, like sticking your head into an old dustbin. The reason why became obvious as our night vision kicked in. It was littered with fish bones, hundreds of them. Whether otter, heron or bear had done this over millennia, we did not know. The sooty darkness at the back of the cave seemed gloomy and dank and we felt that only impure, wicked things would be found there. None of us had the courage to delve any further. The bones seemed to grin up at our hesitation as we turned to go out.

We burst through the wall of water and looked up to see a hopeful, polestar-blue sky. A cup of hot soup was waiting for us and we sipped in silence. The fragrance of the marzipan sweet flowers added to the peace. It tasted unearthly and Arcadian after the experience of the cave. It gave a new meaning to the term comfort food.

 

 

                     LEVEL 5: COMPLEX WRITING: ROCK AND AWE

I ambled along the mountain path. An unusual humming sound vibrated in the air. It sounded like a swarm of bees. Then the buzzing transferred to the rock beneath my feet. It travelled through my body and I felt a tingle that ran up to my fingertips. I rounded the corner and the source of the sound revealed itself.

It was a whirruping waterfall. At this distance, it looked like silver tear tracks on the wrinkled face of the mountain. It was tiered and plunged into the depths of a paradise-blue pool. As I began to get closer, the noise of the cataract increased. It was growling and rumbling. Then it foamed into lather at the base. The waterfall seemed to fuse itself into distinct threads of watery fabric as I approached. It was as if a loom of liquid silver was pouring down the rocks. The sound was cacophonous now. The spout was hitting the cavernous hollow of the pool like a thunderclap. It rushed down the mountain, roiling and bubbling, boiling and churning. The pool fed two other smaller waterfalls, but they were not as deafening.

I walked along the edge of the rocks, leaving the swollen noise of the large pool behind. The sounds changed to a gentler swoosh-plunk and hiss-plop. It was still a salvo of sound, but it had a gentler slushiness to it. The two waterfalls streamed into one infinity pool of bliss. From it, the last spillway flowed, as smooth and fluvial as silver dew. It spilled over the gravelly bed with the honeyed sensuality of a lover’s kiss. It was chiming as it slid, svelte and slinky, past my feet. The chinking, tinkling sound was caused by its languid slickness echoing from rock. It looked like the sleek robe of a water witch as its glassy brilliance pinged and plinked. Its edges were seamed in silver and glinted in the aureate light.

Just then, the sun came out. Its rays caught the watery slide, giving it a trance-like quality. It turned it a-glitter, like shreds of silky silver. The airy sparkling of its spray was magical. It looked like a spritz of fairy dust, flickering in the slanted light. It had the dreamy and illusory façade of a Renaissance painting and the same shimmering sorcery a mirage brings. The drizzling spray created a filmy mystique above the pool, dazzling me with its beauty. It gurgled from the depths and tinkled on the surface, swishing with a sylph-like melody.

The noise subsided as I walked away. It became a distant humming again. I ventured one look back over my shoulder. The willowy waterfall flashed silver one more time. Its soul-swelling magic followed me all the way home.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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24 responses to “Describing Waterfalls

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  1. nice website for adjectives

  2. Hi Manasvi:
    I hope you are well. Thanks for taking the time to comment. Much appreciated and I will keep uploading posts like these. Thanks for the feedback. Cheers for now. Liam.

  3. Thankyou so much it helped me understand all about waterfalls and write my essay on it

  4. will you please post a creative writing on space

    • Hi K. Tejith:
      I hope you are well. I will think about it but I prefer using the five senses in my writing. That might prove difficult describing space! I will get back to you on this shortly. Take care for now. Liam.

      • Just a reminder, which I’m sure you already know Liam, you can easily use all your senses in space, as if you were in space, you’d either be in the space station, on a fictional ship, or in a suit. Therefore, you can hear the hissing of your own breath in your ears, the thumping of your anxious heartbeat, smell the sanitized plastic parts that never lost their acrid scent no matter how many times they were washed, feel not only the cold, but the inside of your cotton gloves, or the lighter-than-air sensation of swimming through the oxygen. Maybe the air has a metallic taste, like pennies in your mouth? I’m sure there are other beeps and boops to hear, lights to see, galaxies to envision in colorful bursts of luminosity… You get the idea. Just because space itself is dark and cold, doesn’t mean you can explain what space is like, or space travel. And describing space itself can be done in explosions of adjectives if you think of the temperatures of stars relative to dwarf planets, the colors in nebulas and what you imagine dark matter must feel and smell like. If it’s fiction, make it up.

  5. It was very useful for my project as well as to make me understand
    nicely described loved it

  6. Oh , just what I was looking for… Thanks so much Liam, you rock! Do you have lessons on writing? I have an exam coming up and would like some help. 🙂 BTW I love waterfalls, bye!

  7. Hi Louis:
    Hope things are well for you. I don’t do as much as I should on the craft of writing. However, I believe Stephen King’s lessons on writing are as good as you can get. Try Googling him as he wrote a book on it and his advice is platinum-standard. Hope this helps and I will consider putting up a post on writing a novel in the near future. Thanks for the nice comment and ‘bye for now. Liam.

  8. Wow …itz amazing …and quite helpful for students…..

    kaushiki chakrabarty
  9. Hi Kaushiki:
    I hope you’re well. Thanks for the nice comment. It is very much appreciated. Liam.

  10. Hi Kaushiki:
    I hope you’re well. Thanks for the nice comment. It is very much appreciated. Cheers for now. Liam.

  11. are you are a robot? u keep saying the same thing, but anyways your descriptive writing was creative and useful for me….
    but could you think about doing simpler one’s for beginners u used huge words too big for me anyways

  12. Hi Saby James:
    Hope all is well. No, I’m not a robot, but sometimes I wish I was one in order to write faster! Thanks for the comment and I note the point you’ve made. Will do my best to make the words simpler. Cheers for now. Liam.

  13. Reblogged this on Olga Cotey.

  14. Wow best of the best

  15. Hi Nicole:
    Wishing you well. Thanks for the kind comment. Much appreciated. ‘Bye for now. Liamo.

  16. Wow. You are really good with words. Thank you for sharing this.

  17. Hi Airen:
    Thanks for the kind comment. ‘Bye for now. Liam.

  18. This descriptive writing is absolutely horrible. It is completely lacking in thoughtful creativity. Our educational system is a travesty.

  19. Hi Jenn:
    Wow. That was pretty comprehensive-and illuminating! Thanks for the sage advice and I got quite a lot from it. Just looked at your website also. VERY impressive. Hope your new book is coming along nicely and congrats for your success to date. ‘Bye for now. Liam.

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